Peer Review for

My final blog post will provide a peer review for one of my classmates.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Elizabeth Hernandez
Open Post to Peer Review

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed 

I decided to give some advice on the conventions of a QRG.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)


I think I helped Elizabeth utilize more of the QRG conventions that will maintain her readers attention.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback 

I gave convention advice.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

I liked the depth Elizabeth was able to achieve with her QRG

Editorial Report

This blog post will provide another editorial report for my final project

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I did not have content to start out with

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I tried to be relatable.

Rough Cut

Research

I will reference my research report to show how in depth our research was. This will give my reader insight to our projects.

I will reference my February blog posts to show my readers how much research we needed to do on our interviewees. This makes me look credible to my audience.

Re-Edited

Editorial Report

This blog post will provide one editorial report for my final project.

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added actual content

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I did not have a structure set up yet in the rough cut

Rough Cut

Body Section

Time management

Provide work / class / club schedule to allow my reader to understand how it was sometimes difficult to allow an excessive amount of time for English. This is important because they may be able to relate.

I will talk about other class tests and downfalls. This will provide reasons for not always prioritizing English assignments.

Re-Edited

Open Post to Peer Review

This blog post will provide a rough draft of my final project

Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know


I wasn't sure if we were supposed to add specific things from our projects or just create an overview.

Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)

I realize towards the end the topics are not as in detail but I'll add to them.

Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

I really like the humanness or realness I added to this project.

Rough Cut

Peer Review

This blog will provide a peer review for Coby Allred.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Coby Allred 

Production Report

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I decided to review Coby's rough cut and make some global suggestions.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how 

did you help them make their work better?)

I think Coby already has an idea of more he is going to add to his conclusion but I think referencing his body paragraph topics would bring everything to a solid end.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings 

(or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I just gave some global suggestions

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

I like the emotional appeal that Coby put in his conclusion.

Production Report

This blog post will provide a production report for my final project

How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I am writing in paragraph form because I have left a standard college essay as my final genre.

How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

This production was kind of easy considering I know everything about every project I have done so the words just kind of flowed.

Outline Item

In my closing I will reiterate some of my opening and explain how going back and analyzing my work and process will help me be able to know how to manage all of my topics for future assignments.  

Adapted Outline Item

This class was difficult. It was an adjustment getting used to feeling as though I was not learning anything when I was and having to get over not wanting to do all the blog posts prior to the projects. Learning to adjust to our professor's grading style and getting used to having hours of English homework every weekend was definitely challenging but it taught me how to better manage my time while balancing my personal life. I also learned the importance of researching and how sources can either benefit or destroy you.

Production Report

This blog post will provide a production report for my final project

How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I am writing in paragraph form because I have left a standard college essay as my final genre.

How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

This production was kind of easy considering I know everything about every project I have done so the words just kind of flowed.

Outline Item

"In this section, I will introduce myself along with all of the projects we have done so far. I can provide references to my projects production work to help my reader understand my thought processes. Also i will provide background as to why I chose the topics I did."

Adapted Outline Item


We've all been there. A difficult class we didn't necessarily want to take but needed to because we were told to. We moan and we groan but, if we're diligent students, we get the job done. My name is Erin McCabe, freshman Veterinary Science Major at the University of Arizona, and this was my view going into my assigned English 109H class. The first week of class we were told we would have 4 projects, 4 genres, and weekly blog posts to complete. What? I have to do a controversy postmortem, rhetorical investigation, public argument, and a final while also figuring out how to manipulate those into either a quick reference guide, podcast, video essay, or college essay? No thank you. But did we do it? Yes. Was it difficult? Yes. Did I have a smile on my face the whole time? Definitely not.

Production Schedule

This blog will provide a rough production schedule for my final project.

Schedule

Monday (5/2) - blog posts
Tuesday (5/3) - create complete rough draft
Wednesday (5/4) - fine tune rough draft
Thursday (5/5) - make final copy (tweak)
Friday (5/6) - submit final

What is to be done

Legitimately Everything

Location

Arbol de la Vida Dorm

Planned date & time

see above

Resources required

• laptop
• past projects
• the will to finish

Date completed

5 / 6 / 2016

Changes made after completion & reasons why

no changes have been made so far

Content Outline

The blog post will provide a rough outline for my final project.

An opening section

In this section, I will introduce myself along with all of the projects we have done so far. I can provide references to my projects production work to help my reader understand my thought processes. Also i will provide background as to why I chose the topics I did.

Body Section

Research

I will reference my research report to show how in depth our research was. This will give my reader insight to our projects.

I will reference my February blog posts to show my readers how much research we needed to do on our interviewees. This makes me look credible to my audience.

Body Section

Time management

Provide work / class / club schedule to allow my reader to understand how it was sometimes difficult to allow an excessive amount of time for English. This is important because they may be able to relate.

I will talk about other class tests and downfalls. This will provide reasons for not always prioritizing English assignments.

Body Section

Personal Care

I will reference my "open post to peer review" to show my audience that I was sick during our entire 3rd project. This will provide emotional appeal.

I can talk about my personal eating / exercise / sleep habits to further explain why I was sick and why it was difficult to stay awake sometimes. This will give my readers something to sympathize with.

A closing section

In my closing I will reiterate some of my opening and explain how going back and analyzing my work and process will help me be able to know how to manage all of my topics for future assignments.  

Peer Review for Gabby Dietrich

This blog will provide a peer review for one of my coursemates.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Revised Post to Peer Reviewers
Gabby Dietrich

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I chose to review Gabby's fine cut.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how 

did you help them make their work better?)

I suggested things to further engage her audience and maintain attention.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I provided global revision suggestions.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

We both did video essays and I was beneficial to see another persons project.

Peer Review for Rhiannon Bauer

This blog will provide a peer review for one of my classmates.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Open Post to Peer Review
Rhiannon Bauer

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I chose to review her rough draft.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how 

did you help them make their work better?)

I think Rhiannon has a really good paper. She just needs to review and edit some grammar and punctuation.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I suggested some global revisions.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

I like how Rhiannon did this from an uncommon opinion stand point.

Revised Post to Peer Review

This blog will provide a fine cut to my Project 3 Video Essay.

Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know.

I understand the beginning is a little slow. It is meant as an introduction to SeaWorld's background establishing a foundation for my argument not really to argue the history of SeaWorld.

Major issues or weaknesses in the Fine Cut that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses).

The slower beginning. There is music in the beginning its just soft.

Major virtues or strengths in the Fine Cut that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths).

I hope my viewers can understand my references and have a little laugh in spite of the seriousness of my topic.

Fine Cut

Reflection on Project 3

This blog post will provide a reflection on my third project

What were some of the successes (or, things that went right) during this week’s process work? 

Explain, with evidence.


I thought of a lot of different visuals and tools to add to my project to better cater to my intended audience. I think I succeeded in providing my opinion while engaging my audience.

What were some of the challenges (or, things that went wrong) during this week’s process work? Explain, with evidence.

I still haven't been feeling 100% which played into both time management and recording time this week.

How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

I am excited to start our final project.

How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I am honestly really proud of this project and the research I put into it along with the little funny / witty aspects of it.

Editorial Report

This blog post will provide an editorial report for project 3

How did the content change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

Again, I added audio and visuals to further maintain my audience's attention.

How did the form change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I really liked my tone and arguments in this section. I didn't change the audio but I did add different visuals during my editing process.

Selection from Rough Cut

Re-edited Selection

Editorial Report

This blog post will provide an editorial report for project 3

How did the content change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added visuals and audio to maintain the audiences attention.

How did the form change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I liked the way I formed my rough draft version of this so I didn't change it much.

Selection from Rough Cut

Re-edited Selection

Open Post to Peer Review

This blog post will provide a rough, rough, cut for my third project.

Rough Cut

Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

Also I know for the second part I don't have visuals but I will be adding those for the final. I'm really looking for comments on my content / tone before I try to make an elaborate project.

I think a major thing to keep in mind is that not only is this a super rough cut, I have also been sick for 2 weeks. It was challenging to find a day when my voice didn't sound like a gremlin in order to record with the right tone. I don't know if I necessarily found that day but I did try so I am sorry if I sound unamused. I was amused I've just been slowly dying.

Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses).

I think my biggest weakness is my tone considering how sick I've been.

Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

I have been doing a lot of research and in so my opinion and plan for my entire project have both changed. It is really easy to get swept up in what everyone else says and follow the crowd and I am trying to give a clear headed argument in my project.

Editorial Report 12B

The blog post will provide another edited version of my final cut

Selection from Rough Cut

Re-edited Version

How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added a video clip of the original Shamu. I think this gives a sentimental value to the origin of the orca shows. Also a lot of people think the first shamu was a male which is not true.

How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I rerecorded some sections that I felt I sounded too sick. Also in my first draft I said the wrong illness so it was crucial to rerecord that to reestablish my credibility. Other than that I worked pretty hard on my first draft and I liked it enough to not completely change everything.

Peer Review for Emily Bond

This blog post will provide another peer review for one of my coursemates.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed

Emily Bond

Editorial Report 12b

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed

I decided to review Emily's content.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

I think I was able to guide Emily toward a more QRG aesthetic piece. She mentions herself it looks more like a QRG than a college essay now but she still has a little bit to correct.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback

I suggested more genre oriented edits for Emily. She has a solid QRG but it could be a little better technical wise.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from

I like the clean flow of Emily's project. It's a little more difficult to do that in a video essay having to control your voice the entire time but I can incorporate this more into my project.

Peer Review for Rigo Avila

This blog post will provide a peer review for one of my classmates.

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed.

Rigo Avila

Editorial Report

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed. Review Document.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed.

I selected to make a content suggestion as to what Rigo could add or subtract.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how did you help them make their work better?)

Since we are still in the production phase, I think urging Rigo to get a rough video clip up is really beneficial since I know how long it is taking to get my stuff done as well.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback.

I just suggested Rigo post his video clip just so he could get a clear perspective of what kind of edits he should make instead of edits on a "script".

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from.

I definitely understand if Rigo doesn't have a rough cut up because of a time issue. That's where i am at right now.

Editorial Report 12A

This blog post will provide an edit of a section of my final project.

Selection from Rough Cut

Re-edited Selection

How did the content change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I was able to add video and more sounds to this edited version. I think movement and the visuals makes the impact come to life and give it purpose.

How did the form change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I tried to use a little bit different language and include other animals that are effected at SeaWorld not just orcas

Peer Review for Sienna Willis

This blog post will provide a review for one of my coursemates

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed.


Sienna Willis
Production Report 11b

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed.


I decided to review Sienna's rough cut and offer form advice.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how 

did you help them make their work better?).


At complete first glance, I noticed Sienna's paragraphs were a little word heavy. I don't think she needs to cut down the word count but I suggested breaking up the paragraphs a little just to help maintain the readers attention.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback.

I just made some form suggestions that I know our professor will look for in the final drafts.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from.

Again, Sienna seems passionate about her Barbie topic like Sarah did. I hope my sick voice doesn't take away from my video essay.

Peer Review for Sarah Hansen

This blog post will provide a review for one of my classmates

The name of the title and author for the project you reviewed.


Sarah Hansen
Content Outline

A working hyperlink to the project you reviewed.

An explanation of the peer review activity you selected for the project you reviewed.

I selected the outline to make sure Sarah continues to check back to it just in case she accidentally strays from what she wants to convey.

An explanation of how you think you helped the author with your feedback (in other words, how 

did you help them make their work better?).

I just wanted to remind Sarah to not get so into one subject that she forget the overall goal of the project.

An explanation of how you incorporated something from the suggested Student’s Guide readings (or any other course materials, if you’d prefer) into your feedback.

Sarah has a really solid start. It was difficult to make revision suggestions but I think the main thing for her paper will be staying on topic without varying too much from her original ideas.

One thing about their work that you admired or think you could learn from.

Sarah obviously has a passion for what she is writing about and I hope mine comes through as much as hers does.

Reflection on Production Phase

This blog will provide a review of my production week.

What were some of the successes during this week’s process work? 

I learned a lot this week. A lot about how much I do and do not know about my project. Also I've learned how many different sources have different information on the same topic.

What were some of the challenges during this week’s process work?

I have not been feeling well this week so finding a day on which I could record without sounding like a gremlin or a dying cat was definitely a struggle.

How do you think next week will go, based on your experiences this week?

I'm hoping I start feeling better and can record the other segments of my video without unintentionally scaring my audience.

How are you feeling about the project overall at this point?

I like how much I am learning about my subject and figuring out things just how complicated the situation is.

Production Report

This blog post will provide another clip of my Project 3.

Outline Item

"In my first section I will provide a background of Sea World and how the company got started. I will provide dates and records of the owner. These will help people understand why Sea World was founded. This will give people an insight to the founders mind."

Adaptation of Outline Item

Section One Adaptation

How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here?

Again I needed to maintain the audiences attention. To do this I employed the power of visual arts and music.

How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

In order to maintain attention and curiosity i needed to use visual and audio files.

How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

Again, I need to learn how to better use video editing software.

Production Report

This blog post will provide one clip of my Project 3.

Outline Item

"In my intro I will clearly state the argument I will be reporting on. I will describe the setting of all Sea World locations not just the California location. I here I will add Sea World theme music and possibly breaching sounds."

Adaptation of Outline Item

Intro Adaptation

How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here?

I decided to incorporate audio, pictures and background music to enhance my raw material.

How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

In order to maintain the viewers attention, I needed some in-your-face type content. A video essay with no capturing hooks or persuasive music would be boring and the viewer would choose to not watch.

How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?

I still need to learn how to work some of the video editing software so the transitions from picture to picture aren''t so sudden.