Saturday, February 27, 2016

Report on My Interviews

In this blog post, I am supposed to evaluate both of my interviewees but I have only interviewed one so far.This post will center around Kylie Smith until my second interview is conducted.

Genres:

In my interview with Kylie, we mostly discussed her parasitology lab. She is an undergraduate / graduate in the masters accelerated program at the U of A so she is in the last year of her undergrad. With this privilege, she is taking mostly grad level classes with only one undergrad class in her schedule. She mostly uses email, texting, and formal essay type writing in the case of her defense.

How Are The Genres Different?

Kylie described her comfort level with how she communicates with her colleagues. When communicating with her research team or people she is comfortable with, she will text and be more informal.

When she is speaking to her bosses or directors she uses email to communicate more formally. Her defense at the end of this semester will be a speech basically defending her senior thesis. Her thesis will be an essay / paper she will write on her 3 year long research project.

What Is Challenging About These Genres?

Texting - With texting it can be difficult to judge how informal you can be with a person especially if one person is very comfortable with the relationship and one is more formal.

Email - Email can be very time consuming. For example, with these interviews we are conducting, we need an answer fairly quickly but our interviewees may not check their emails as often as we are forced to and therefore do not respond as quickly.

Essay / Paper - A paper, especially a thesis, is difficult in the sense of content. A paper needs to be heavy enough to convey all of the authors thoughts and arguments while also staying entertaining.

What Is Exciting About These Genres?

Texting - Texting is exciting because if shows you have formed a bond with someone well enough to have their personal number. Plus, you can get quick responses from it.

Email - Email is exciting because you can get in contact with someone anywhere in the world as long as you know their email. For example, I could email Dr. Jeffery from my "From Academia to Social Media" blog.

Essay / Paper - A paper can be exciting if you are passionate about what you are writing about and truly want to inform other people about the subject.

Where In Mass Media Can These Genres Be Found?

Texting can be found on a typical phone or in screenshot form on the internet.

Email can be found on the internet, not necessarily on social media.

Essays and papers are also easily accessed through the internet. Sometimes, even Facebook and Twitter links lead their audience to outside essay sources. A very popular thing now is open letter articles.
MacEntee, Sean. "thesis" 10/14/2010 via flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic

From Academia to Social Media

This blog post will continue to delve into the journal I have been looking into in my past blogs.

Author and Their Social Media

Nicholas Jeffery - Twitter , LinkedIn , Facebook

Presence

Nick Jeffery's social media pages are all very professional from what I can gather. His Facebook account is private so I cannot comment on that, but his Twitter page is public. His recent Twitter is mostly him retweeting Vodafone tweets from other people.

In my search, I learned that Nick is a DVM. with a PhD. (very hard). He lives in The UK.

Social Media vs. Academic Journal

The piece from the journal I chose did not specifically state what author offered what information. With that being said, the article is very formal and factual. This is also how Nick Jeffery portrays himself in his social media. If his Facebook page says otherwise to people that can view it, then it is very professional and smart of him to keep it private.
Searls, Doc. "zoe1" 02/03/2012 via flickr. Attributions 2.0 Generic

Academic Discourse and Genre

This blog post will explore the journal I explored in my previous blog posts in more depth.

How Many Different Kinds of Genre are in This Journal?

When I looked through the journal, I could only find one genre: QRG.

3 Different genres

I could not find anymore than 1 genre in my particular academic journal, but the difference between a QRG and an essay, for example, is that  QRG uses bullet points, white space, and pictures to maintain the readers attention.

Personal Definition of Genre

QRG- a short condensed standard essay.

A QRG is factual and to the point. It is supposed to be used as a "quick reference" that also provides outside information to allow the reader to delve more in to the topic if they wish to do so.
Queiroga, Luiz Guilherme. "A Banner" 09/08/2013 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic




Rhetorical Analysis of Academic Journal

This blog will explore one article from a journal posted in my blog "My Discipline"

Journal of the American Veterinary Medical AssociationFactors associated with recovery from paraplegia in dogs with loss of pain perception in the pelvic limbs following intervertebral disk herniation.

Author: 


There are 8 authors credited in the article I have chosen: Nick D. JefferyAndrew K. BarkerHilary Z. HuCody J. AlcottKarl H. KrausElizabeth M. ScanlinNicolas GrangerJonathan M. Levine. If one looks at the front page of the article, all of the authors are listed with hyperlinks attached to their names. The hyperlinks forward the reader to more articles these authors have contributed to. The authors are not specifically referenced in the article.

Audience:

The intended audience for this article is the veterinary community including doctors and medical staff. The journal entry states "In a prospective study of 78 dogs that underwent spinal decompression surgery..." Any scientist knows that a good study is one that can be replicated with varying outcomes. 

The fact that they being this particular sentence with talking about the study means they are reaching out to other veterinary medical professionals to further the study and see if they come out with the same results. Secondary audience would be people like me looking up the article online.

Context:

This entry was written on February 15, 2016. This article is written in a QRG type style. It has a lot of white space, subheadings, and pictures throughout the article. "JAVMA News""Commentary" "Small Animals" are some of the subheadings.

Message:

The message of this journal is the contents of the study performed to relieve paraplegic animals of pain perception. "In a prospective study of 78 dogs that underwent spinal decompression surgery because of IVDH and loss of deep pain perception in the pelvic limbs, 45 of 78 (58%) were able to ambulate independently within 3 months after surgery."

Purpose:

The purpose of this journal is to draw attention to possible pain relief for paraplegic animals. The title of the article relates to "paraplegia in dogs that lost pain perception in the pelvic limbs following inter-vertebral disk herniation". 

My Discipline

This blog will further explore Veterinary Science for project 2.

What Do Vet Sci Students Learn?

Veterinary Science student' studies mainly focus heavily on biology, chemistry, and physics sciences. The point of a Veterinary Science degree is to gain a fundamental understanding of animal anatomy and disease while gaining outside experience before going on to an actual veterinary school.

What Kind of Profession Do They Go Into?

People with a Veterinary Science degree can go on to  be veterinary scientists, obedience trainers, pet groomers, veterinarians, animal care and service workers, and veterinary technologists and technicians. Most of these professions handle pets, zoo animals, and livestock.

Why Did I Choose Vet Sci?

Ever since I was little, I have always told people I want to be a veterinarian. Before coming to college, I had a little bit of an identity crisis and thought to myself "what if I don't want to be a vet I've just been told I would be good at it for so long that I feel obligated to do it now?". This forced me to declare Undeclared as my major and I looked into being a human doctor for a while. After about a month I realized the only reason I was thinking about being an MD was due to my obsession with Grey's Anatomy. I now and back with Vet Sci and will soon be declaring. I love animals and it breaks my heart to see them suffer especially at the hands of people. If I can  do anything to help them, I feel it is my moral duty to be a voice for the voiceless.

3 Important People

6th Global Veterinary Summit - I chose this organization because of the sheer mass of it. There are so many medical minds that congregate.

International Association for Aquatic Animal Medicine - In high school, I took a marine biology class and it was easily the best class I have ever taken. I love marine life and this organization centers around it!

American Pre-Veterinary Medical Association - This organization is important because it caters to me. I am a pre-vet undergrad and this organization provides information on conferences I can attend and being a part of a community like this looks very good on a veterinary school application.

3 Leading Vet Sci Journals


Journal of Veterinary Science - Seoul, South Korea

Wakefield, Sean. "Veterinary Nurse,34" 06/26/2007 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial-                                                                             ShareAlike 2.0 Generic

Thursday, February 25, 2016

My Interviewees on Social Media

This blog will analyze my interviewees social media links and their personas.

Social Media:

Kylie Smith - Facebook, LinkedIn

Paula D. Johnson - LinkedIn

Presence:

I was unable to find either of my interviewees on most social media sights. I found both Dr. Johnson and Kylie on LinkedIn, which provides a little bit of information on them professionally. I am assuming Kylie may have a Twitter or Instagram and I am just unable to find her.

I did learn that Kylie is an avid animal lover. Her Facebook page consists of mostly pictures of her and horses or the calves she works with in her research lab.

Dr. Johnson is either very elusive on social media or just does not have any accounts. This surprised me. Most people, no matter their age, usually have at least a Facebook account.

Persona:

This is a difficult section to fill out. I have social media from Kylie, but no published works of hers. On the other hand, I have professional work from Dr. Johnson but no social media. I feel as though I cannot comment on Kyie because of this. Dr. Johnson, however, seems like a very work oriented person, someone that does not have time to sit on social media.
mkhmarketing. "Social Media Class" 03/08/2013 via flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic



My Interviewees as Professional Writers

This blog will further explore my interviewees for project 2.

Interviewees:

Kylie Smith is still in her accelerated masters program. She has not yet published any professional work but she will be presenting her research project, her defense, within the next few months.

Paula Johnson is a DVM MS. Most works that I have found by Dr. Johnson have been long papers concerning her research.

Publications:

Like I previously stated, since Kylie is a student still, she has not yet published any professional work.

Two examples of Dr. Johnson's publications can be found here and here. Most publications by Dr. Johnson look very similar. They have a very professional beginning with an abstract that flows into the rest of the paper. 

Context:

Again, since Kylie is a student still, she has not yet published any professional work.

Dr. Johnson's choice of vocabulary is very sophisticated in her writing. It seems as though her intended audience is a more complex very specific group.
 "The objective of this study was to orally treat pregnant CDR(CD) Sprague-Dawley rats with large bolus doses of either TCE (500 mg/kg), TCA (300 mg/kg), or DCA (300 mg/kg) once per day on days 6 through 15 of gestation to determine the effectiveness of these materials to induce cardiac defects in the fetus." This article was written in August of 2001.

In her second article, Dr.Johnson caters more to the general public. The topic of this article is the practicality of using animals as research subjects. Her vocabulary changes very much in this article. She speaks more in laymen terms such as "Likely the most critical step in designing animal experiments is the identification of the most appropriate animal model to address the experimental question being asked". 


Message:

The message of Dr. Johnson's first piece is to convey the effect of certain drugs on fetuses. I concluded this from her intro "determine the effectiveness of these materials to induce cardiac defects in the fetus".

The message of the second piece is to prove to the general public how animal testing is beneficial in the long run and how there are regulations researchers have to follow. She analyzes the "logistics of the actual performance of the animal experiments" and provides outside sources to back her information up.

Purpose:

The purpose of Dr. Johnson's first piece is to analyze the effects of drugs on rat fetuses versus a control group. Also if there is actually any effect on their hearts. "Further research is needed to quantify the spontaneous rates of heart defects for vehicle control rats"

The purpose of her second piece is to sympathize with her intended audience and provide reasonable justification for animals in research. "identifying the most appropriate statistical analyses and potential collaborators experienced in the area of study".

National Eye Institute. "Laboratory Research" 07/10/2012 via flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic

My Interview Subjects

This blog post will begin my process for project 2 by outlining my interview subjects.

Interviewees:

Kylie Smith

Paula D. Johnson

Organizations:

Kylie Smith is currently a graduate student at the University of Arizona. She has recently been accepted into the accelerated masters program.

Paula Johnson is the Head of Veterinary Surgery at the University of Arizona Animal Care,
Executive Director, Southwest Association for Education in Biomedical Research and also a 
Consulting Veterinarian.

Degree:

Kylie Smith has a degree in Microbiology from the University of Arizona.

Paula Johnson has a Doctor of Veterinary Medicine degree along with an MS masters degree.

Years:

Kylie Smith is a graduate student and is still working toward completing her masters. She is curently working on her own research project that she has been conducting for the past 3 years.

I am currently unable to clearly state how long Dr. Johnson has been in this field with the information I am able to view online.

Photo: 
Kylie Smith
Kylie Smith


Paula D. Johnson
Research

Interviews:

Kylie Smith- 11:30am Wednesday 2/24/2016 in the Arbol de la Vida great room

Paula Johnson- 11:30am Monday 2/29/2016 via phone call

Interview Questions:

Kylie Smith


  • Where did you get your undergraduate degree?
  • What was your degree?
  • Why did you pick U of A for Grad school?
  • Do you have a current vet science job? Internship?
  • Why did you choose to go into this profession?
  • Can you describe the main form of communication you use to connect with your colleagues? What about the general public? Are you required to publish work as a graduate student?
  •  What other genres do you use? Social media? Conference / Lectures? Email / texting?
  • How do you manage your time with these publications?
  • I see you've done research in a lab setting, could you describe that experience to me and what kinds of work you had to do?
Paula Johnson

  • Where did you get your undergraduate degree?
  • What was your degree?
  • Where did you go to graduate school why did you pick this school? Did you receive your MS while you were in graduate school or before?
  • What is your official title / how would you describe your job?
  • Why did you choose to go into this profession?
  • Can you describe the main form of communication you use to connect with your colleagues? What about the general public?
  •  What other genres do you use? Social media? Conference / Lectures? Email / texting?
  • How do you manage your time with these publications?
  • Would you be able to give me examples of these types of genres that I can access online maybe?
Hurst,Matthew."Interview Questions"09/29/2010 via flickr. Attribution-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic

Sunday, February 21, 2016

Brutally Honest Self-Assessment

This blog will outline my feelings toward and about my first submitted project.

Q: How are you feeling about the project you just submitted for assessment? Give me your raw, unvarnished opinion of your own project overall. 
A: I honestly feel like I greatly improved my project from the draft to the final product. The peer review was really helpful and gave really good tips on how to enhance my project. I feel pretty decently about my final product. At this point, I am not sure how to feel about the grading system. I think I executed everything that was asked of us, but my professor may not think the same.

Q: What are the major weaknesses of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be weak or under-developed.
A: A weak point in my project would be second guessing myself. When I do this I tend to babble and try to overly fulfill the requirements just in case I mess up on one aspect, I can get points for other aspects.

Q: What are the major strengths of the project you submitted? Explain carefully how and why you consider these elements to be strong or well-developed.
A:  A major strength of my project is my use of stakeholders. I was really interested in this topic and chose to do a lot of research into my stakeholders. The most cliche approach to refute de-extinction would be to talk about religious views regarding it (which one of my reviewers mentioned). Instead of taking that easy way out, I delved into the scientific rebuttals. Someone in the same profession as the scientists experimenting that has different opinions on the subject in my opinion was more interesting than the usual "religion doesn't like it because morals and ethics etc".

Q: What do you think of how you practiced time management for Project 1? Did you put enough time and effort into the project? Did you procrastinate and wait till the last minute to work on things? Share any major time management triumphs or fails....
A: To be brutally honest, I did not spend all of my time on this project. With 3 professors all telling me I need to spend 20 hours a week on their subject, one or two are bound to suffer from lack of time. It is not physically possible for me to spend 70 hours (10 for another class) a week on homework plus 19 hours of class, working, working out, and sleeping. If I tried to do this I would burn out so quick  that I would destroy my drive for projects later in the semester. With that being said, I spent as much time as I could on this project without interfering with other classes. Yes, I do most of my work for this class on the weekends, but that is when I have time to focus.
Chen, Duncan."Rocky Balboa"02/12/2016 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic

Local Revision: Passive and Active Voice

This blog will further analyze my verb usage in my first project. It will separate verbs into passive, active(specific), and active(general).

                     Passive                                   Active (Specific)                           Active (General)

happening
is – 14
be – 2
are - 4
have - 4
became
was - 12
has
would
happened
allow
become
cloning
reproducing
de-extinct
revive
born
split
compare
frozen
killing
overshadow
claims
extract
referred
obtained
adapted
killed
caught
preserved
gathered
stripped
injected
implanted
carried
cloned
adapted
intertwined
invaded
issued
signed
attended - 2
acquired
reassured
slaughtered

try - 2
think
bringing
causing
breathe
die
consider
means
limits
speak - 3
understand
looks
dresses
want
present
known
compare
lives
resemble
choosing
receive – 2
further
claims
goes
asks
telling
placed
carried
lived - 3
died - 3
raised
brought - 2
called
received


Q: Looking at the breakdown of your verb choices here, what do you notice about your current draft? Are the actions in your piece mostly general, vague or non-specific? Are the actions mostly vivid and specific? Are there instances of passive voice? Summarize what you learned by analyzing your verb usage in this way.
A: Based off of this breakdown of my verbs, my draft contains a lot of active specific and active general verbs. I am a little surprised at how many active specific verbs I employed. My draft was a very rough cut that I had planned to go back and revise a lot before submission. With this being said, I am quite happy with how much detail I was able to capture in my specific choices. I do use passive voice also in my draft.

Q: Based on this analysis, how could your use of verbs be improved overall in the project? Be specific and precise in explaining this.
A: Although my active verb columns look incredibly longer than my passive verb column, if you look closely I use my passive verbs more often than my active. This tells me I am somewhat repetitive in my writing. By changing around my sentence structure, I can improve the overall quality of my project.
925*18 "verb, what" 05/23/2008 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial 2.0 Generic

Local Revision: Variety

This blog will explore my sentence variety in my first project.

Q: How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? 
A: I do notice a lot of repetitive sentence structures in my first draft. The verb is is abundant in my project. By choosing to use different sentence structures and verbs, I could better maintain my audiences attention.

Q: What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)?
A: Instead of using transition sentences and making  my piece flow, I wrote longer paragraphs and separated them into smaller paragraphs to incorporate white space in my QRG. I do think I use transitional phrases well leading into my paragraphs. I am able to incorporate historical facts and relative up-to-date information in my work.

Q: What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?
A: Although I do use a lot of the same verbs like is, was, and are, I do employ a lot of more complex vocabulary throughout my draft. I utilize words like "intertwined" and "slaughtered". I could use more of these complex vocabulary words. A weakness in my vocabulary would be that I do not use the complex vocab throughout my work. By distributing this more throughout my piece, I can appeal to my audience more by appealing to more of their senses using vivid language.
Dooley, Kevin. "St. Joseph Variety Shop" 03/16/2011 via flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic

Saturday, February 20, 2016

Local Revision: Pronoun Usage

This blog will further explore the use of the pronouns I used in my first project.

Q: Based on your analysis, how effective is your pronoun usage in Project 1? What does actively examining your pronoun usage tell you about your writing style?
A: I notice I use pronouns a lot in my writing, specifically when referring to a person. This tells me a few things. I should alternate between referring to someone by their name and using a pronoun instead of referring to them by name once and then using a pronoun every other time I refer to that person. Since I mostly used pronouns when referring to someone, the excess use of these pronouns also tells me I might have too much useless information in my project. By eliminating this excess information, I can reduce the number of pronouns I use and also hopefully better maintain the readers attention.

Q: Are there any instances in your project where you speak to or refer directly to the audience? If so, how effective are these moments at creating a bond or connection between audience and author?
A: I refer to the audience twice in my project. In doing this, I am able to relate to the audience. When I refer to the audience, I am not referring to them with one specific topic in mind. For example, one of the instances in which I refer to the audience (as you) I am encouraging them to watch the TED talk in the hyperlink directly after addressing them. This encouragement prompts the reader to watch the informative TED talk and be able to better understand references later in my writing.
Vernon Barfard School. "If You Were A Pronoun" 04/27/2015 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic

My Pronouns

This blog will provide a list of the pronouns I used in my first project while also listing who / what they refer to.

it (extinct specimen)
It (de-extinction)
you (audience)
her (Celia)
her (Celia)
they (de-extinction team)
her (Celia)
them (goat eggs)
their (goat eggs)
they (de-extinction team)
her (Celia)
its (Bucardo fetus) 
she (Bucardo clone)
her (Bucardo clone)
her (Bucardo clone)
its (specimen donating cells)
it (de-extinction)
He (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
her (Bucardo clone)
she (Bucardo clone)
you (audience)
his (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
their (the de-extinction team)
His (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
He (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
He (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
his (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
He (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
He (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
His (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
his (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
his (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
his (Dr. Fernandez-Arias)
he (Dr. Fernandez-Arias )
Their (Bucardos)
They (Bucardos)
they (Bucardos)
their (Spanish community-Spain)
He (David Ehrenfeld)
he (David Ehrenfeld)
his (David Ehrenfeld)
he (David Ehrenfeld)
his (David Ehrenfeld)
they (scientific discoveries)
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Local Revision: Tense Usage

 This blog will further review the verbs I used in my first project by examining past, present, and future tenses.
                        
                      Past                                              Present                                         Future

referred
obtained
placed
adapted
killed
caught
preserved
gathered
stripped
injected
implanted
became
was - 12
carried
lived - 3
died - 3
raised
brought - 2
cloned
has
called
adapted
would
intertwined
happened
invaded
issued
signed
attended - 2
received
acquired
reassured
slaughtered


cloning
reproducing
try - 2
"de-extinct"
think
happening
bringing
is – 14
revive
be – 2
born
causing
breathe
die
consider
means
have
limits
speak - 3
understand
looks
dresses
want
present
known
split
compare
are - 4
lives
have - 4
resemble
frozen
born – 2
choosing
killing
overshadow
receive – 2
further
claims
become
goes
asks
telling
extract
will allow


Q: Which tense is the most prevalent in your draft?
A: The present tense is the most prevalent in my draft.

Q: What effect or tone/quality does the current usage of tense have on the reader/viewer/listener?
A: Present tense verbs allows the reader to connect with the writing. It puts them in the moment with the story and makes it more relatable to whomever is reading. This allows me, the writer, to better engage with the audience by not only telling them this story but also including them in it.

Q: If you're using more than one tense in the draft (which is not a bad thing at all), do the shifts between different tenses in the piece make sense? How do they flow? Are there any jarring or dischordant shifts in tense?
A: My piece does go back and forth between present and past tense verbs. It flows well because I employ past tense verbs to explain the situation and what was going on during the time of the big event in my controversy while then pulling the reader back to the present and relating the controversy to today.

Q: If you have not employed any present tense verbs in your piece - why not? Are there any moments of crescendo or dramatic action in the story you're telling that could benefit from being described or told in the present tense? Could your piece benefit from that technique? How and why?
A: My piece contains mostly present tense verbs
duncan c. "Tense graffiti, Haygate Estate, Elephant & Castle" 06/29/2013 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial 2.0 Generic

My Verbs

This blog post will present a list of the verbs I use in my first project.

cloning
reproducing
referred
try
de-extinct
think
happening
bringing
obtained
placed
is
adapted
killed
caught
preserved
try
revive
gathered
stripped
injected
implanted
pregnant
was
be
carried
lived
died
born
causing
breathe
die
was
consider
means
be
have
limits
raised
brought
is
was
cloned
lived
died
is
speak
is
understand
is
has
looks
dresses
speak
is
want
present
is
speaking
took
lived
called
known
split
was
adapted
would
compare
are
lives
have
intertwined
are
is
resemble
have
was
extract
frozen
was
born
happened
was
invaded
was
was
choosing
issued
was
killing
was
signed
overshadow
was
died
receive
is
are
is
attended
received
attended
further
receive
claims
is
are
become
is
acquired
goes
asks
is
is
reassured
brought
telling  
slaughtered

Clone- 2
Try - 2
Happen – 2
Bring – 3
Is – 14
Adapt – 2
Kill – 2
Was – 12
Be – 2
Live – 4
Die – 4
Born – 2
Have – 4
Speak – 3
Are – 4
Receive – 3
Attend - 2
Metivier, Pierre. "WORDS" 06/17/2007 via flilckr. Attribution-NonCommercial 2.0 Generic

Local Revision: Wordiness

A common problem with essays and long projects is the assumption that the longer the piece is, the better it is. This is not always true. This blog will follow the revision of one paragraph from my project one draft.

Before:


"It is very easy to get wrapped up in the excitement of this new technology. While de-extinction is an amazing scientific concept and accomplishment, there are potentially negative aspects to consider. Dr. David Ehrenfeld points these out. David Ehrenfeld is a Biology professor at Rutgers University. He attended Harvard University for undergraduate and medical school. In 1963, he received his MD from Harvard. In 1967 he attended The University of Florida to further his career and receive a PhD in zoology."


After:


It is very easy to get wrapped up in the excitement of this new technology. While de-extinction is an amazing scientific concept and accomplishment, there are potentially negative aspects to consider. Dr. David Ehrenfeld, a Biology professor at Rutgers University, addressed these concerns. In 1963, he received his MD from Harvard. In 1967, he received a PhD in zoology.



The edited paragraph has been condensed. From the point of view of the audience, the second paragraph provides information on Dr. Ehrenfeld's credibility without dragging out unnecessary details. The second paragraph is better for that reason. It is more condensed and to the point. 
Argerich, Luis. "Before and After" 12/25/2010 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial 2.0 Generic


Friday, February 12, 2016

Peer Review 2

My rubric for Jackson's piece can be found here.
Jackson's blog post can be found here.
My rubric for Nicholas's piece can be found here
Nicholas's blog post can be found here.

From grading Nicholas and Jackson's projects, more specifically Jackson's QRG, I learned that this project is a lot of information kind of thrown at the reader. Whether or no the audience is interested in the subject does not matter, but how the author can intrigue the audience into becoming interested. This can be difficult with the amount of information in our projects but done right, the outcome can be great.

3 issues: 

One of my biggest issues right now I think is fluidity. I did not try to perfect my draft therefore I will need to tweak it to make sure it flows well and is interesting. 
Another issue with my project is pictures. I do not utilize my white space enough. I only have 2 pictures at the beginning and end so I will need to correct that to maintain the readers attention.
The last issue I think I have is structure. I definitely need to go back through my project and make it as sound as it can be especially building up to the public arguement.

3 strengths:

One strength I think my piece possesses is my passion in it. I was really interested in my controversy and genuinely want my audience to be also.
Another strength I think my piece has is the conventions. Although I do have to build on them, I tried to incorporate as much as I could without going overboard and losing audience.
The last strength I think my piece possesses is my sources. I researched every one of my sources and with doing that was able to connect a lot of information. Information was solidified and both sides of my controversy were presented well. 

Tuesday, February 9, 2016

Peer Review 1

I reviewed Rigo's rough draft. Although he made a very good rough draft, he did not add as much detail about news going on around the world / nationally as I thought we were supposed to do which i reflected in the rubric. I was a little confused as to what the actual controversy was. Also his writing was a little confusing at first almost bouncing from topics but as you keep reading the events are explained. I personally know I need to review my draft and make it flow better. I did like his use of pictures and the amount of information in his draft. It was not too much to where I got bored but enough to where I was not questioning what was going on. I think I need to now go back to my draft and make sure there is enough information on my controversy and not just on the broad topic.

Sunday, February 7, 2016

Draft of Project 1

De-Extinction: Could Jurassic Park Become Reality?
By Erin McCabe on February 7, 2016
Eylar, Alex. "Jurassic Park" 11/07/2009 via flickr. Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike 2.0 Generic

What is De-Extinction?

De-Extinction is essentially cloning a specimen that has gone extinct and reproducing it now. It can also be referred to as resurrection biology or species revivalism. There are two ways to try to "de-extinct" a specimen: cloning and selective breeding

Has De-Extinction Already Happened?

If you were to think about de-extinction with respects to cloning and selective breeding, then yes de-extinction has been happening for quite some time now.

De-extinction in relation to bringing a species back to life has also happened. In 1999, scientists obtained cells from the last living Bucardo, a type of , and placed a tracker on her. A Bucardo is a
type of Spanish Ibex that was highly adapted to the extreme mountain colds and harsh environment. In 2000, Celia, the name of the last Bucardo, was killed by a falling tree. 

Since the team had caught Celia and preserved her cells in liquid nitrogen at -321, they were going to try to revive her now extinct species. Over the next 3 years, the team gathered other goat eggs and stripped them of their DNA. In 2003, they then injected Celia, or rather her cell’s DNA, into the blank eggs. 57 of these mini-Celias were implanted into surrogate goats. Of the 57, only 7 goats became pregnant with the baby Bucardo. Of that 7 only one Bucardo was able to be carried to its birth. 

That baby Bucardo lived for about 10 minutes until she died. The baby goat was born with a defect in one of her lungs causing her to not be able to breath and eventually die. This was the first “successful” de-extinction of a species. 

One thing to consider when talking about de-extinction is that the new organisms are basically clones of the thing donating its cells. This means the new organisms will all be the same gender and have the same genetic make-up. This limits genetic diversity and, if the species reproduces sexually, the production of new baby clones. This attempt at de-extinction raised many questions about cloning and what it entails.

Who Successfully Completed the First De-Extinction?

Alberto Fernandez-Arias along with a team of scientist from Spain and France successfully brought a species back from the grave.

Alberto Fernandez-Arias is a Spanish wildlife veterinarian. He was one of the leaders of a team of scientists that successfully cloned an extinct animal: the Bucardo. The kid only lived for a short while (minutes) before her lungs gave out and she died. Dr. Fernandez-Arias is from Spain but is bilingual and can speak English as you can see in his TED talk about their de-extinction.

 His English, although very intelligent, is very rough. He is a little difficult to understand but with context clues and paying attention he is understandable. Dr. Fernandez-Arias is a middle aged man with hazel colored eyes. He also has a receding hairline that looks almost like a reverse Mohawk. Aside from his lab coat and expedition clothing, he dresses well in slacks and tuxedo jackets. He does not speak with his hands like most people do. 

He seems to be a typical scientists that is a little reserved. His speech is very factual, abrupt, and to the point. In front of a crowd, although he is obviously passionate about his work, he seems to not want to be there. Rather he would like to present his work and be done than elaborate on every detail. This could be because his first language is not English and he was uncomfortable speaking it in front of a crowd.

When and Where Did the First De-Extinction take place?

The de-extinction of the Bucardo, took place where the Bucardo last lived. The species lived in what is called the Iberian Peninsula in Europe. The peninsula, known as Iberia, is split among three countries: Spain, Portugal, and Andorra. The Bucardo was specially adapted to survive the freezing cold as well as the rough mountainous environment. A lot of people would compare this to a mountain goat that can scale sheer cliffs. These goats are totally fine with a centimeter of crumbling rock to walk on.

The Bucardo lives in a place similar to this but not as dramatic. The mountain ranges may have cliffs and sporadic trees. Their habitat also had some farmland intertwined in it. These farmlands are more flat and rocky than cliff-ridden. The Bucardo is a species of wild goat. They do not however resemble goats that we see in petting zoos and on farms. Instead they have longer horns that turn in on themselves like rams.

The cells the team was able to extract from the last living Bucardo were frozen in separate labs. One lab was in Zaragoza and one in Madrid. On June 30, 2003, the first de-extinct Bucardo kid was born via cesarean section.

A lot happened in 2003. Globally, 2003 was the year the US, along with other countries, invaded Iraq. Also 2003 was the year MySpace launched, connecting people from around the globe. During this time, Spain was going through a change in power. The country was in the middle of choosing a leader that could best follow their predecessor.

Also, in Spain, the countries prosecutor issued an order that will allow the deportation of immigrants that come to the country as minors. In local news, on March 11, 2003 the city of Madrid was bombed killing 192 people. In lighter news, 2003 was also the year that famous footballer Christiano Ronaldo was signed to Manchester United.

These events seem to overshadow the de-extinction of the Bucardo. Although this was technically the first ever de-extinction of a species, since the kid died just minutes after birth the resurrection did not receive much praise outside of the science community.

Are There Any Downsides to De-Extinction?

It is very easy to get wrapped up in the excitement of this new technology. While de-extinction is an amazing scientific concept and accomplishment, there are potentially negative aspects to consider. Dr. David Ehrenfeld points these out. David Ehrenfeld is a Biology professor at Rutgers University. He attended Harvard University for undergraduate and medical school. In 1963, he received his MD from Harvard. In 1967 he attended The University of Florida to further his career and receive a PhD in zoology. 

Dr. Ehrenfeld claims "If it works, de-extinction will only target a very few species and it's extremely expensive". While it is true that most scientific discoveries an processes are expensive, over time they become more common, more knowledge is acquired about the topic and the price goes down.

Dr. Ehrenfeld asks "Do we undercut conservation if the public...is led to believe that extinction is only temporary?". Conservation is based off that fact that extinction is forever. If the public is reassured that species can be brought back via de-extinction, there is no telling how much of the worlds species would be slaughtered to extinction. 
Ustun, Gulden. "Tanzania (Ngorongoro) Another view from conservation area" 09/04/2015 via flickr. Attribution 2.0 Generic