Editorial Report A

This blog will go over my editing of one section of my rough draft

How did the content change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

In my edited version, I go more in depth about theses and their form. I also provide outside sources for the audience to reference.

How did the form change when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

In this section, I added in an intro and music. I also used a more excited tone and some sound effects to engage the audience more. I think it will keep the audiences attention in my edited version better.

Rough Cut

ReEdited